#1
tell me what you think and what would be a good name for the song


they kill in the light
dark or day
you plead for them to stay away
they don't listen anyway
they kill in the darkest ways


Chorus
murdered in the dark
murdered by a creativity shark
murdered the ways of a life
murdered with a ****ing knife!


murder the freedom
murder the ways
of how a person shall choose to live these days
we weren't put here to work and stress
I don't want to work at a desk

Chorus

Teachers, faculty, and parents around
your occupation distributes a frown
murdered the kids
murdered the lives
murdered with a ****ing knife!
#5
Quote by Harrydoodle
tell me what you think and what would be a good name for the song


they kill in the light
dark or day
These two lines dont really make sense
you plead for them to stay away
they don't listen anyway
they kill in the darkest ways
I dont like the repeation on the way at the end of these last three lines but thats just me

Chorus
murdered in the dark
murdered by a creativity shark
murdered the ways of a life
murdered with a ****ing knife!
try to avoid repeation, and swearing a lot of people dont care for that

murder the freedom
murder the ways
of how a person shall choose to live these days
I liked these lines but the flow seemed off
we weren't put here to work and stress
I don't want to work at a desk
the rhyme was a little weird here
Chorus

Teachers, faculty, and parents around
your occupation distributes a frown
the first line doesnt make sense, if you cant find a word that rhymes, its alright not every song has to rhyme
murdered the kids
murdered the lives
murdered with a ****ing knife!


It has a message behind it, but the repition kinda kills it and after reading it several times I would work on this quite a bit to be honest, but thats just my opinion