#1
I wrote this song for my girlfriend for valentine's day. It's rather personal and connected to our relationship and I appreciate all comments and criticism and will gladly return all.

My babe
I wish you were here with me tonight
I can't sleep
Just wishing I could hold you tight
Play my guitar
And sing a song all the while thinking of what could be
Just us
In a world of our own, a world of you and me

I wake up every morning to the sound of our song
A rhythm of love and prayer
I go about my day only thinking about you
You're my only real care

So close your eyes
And think about when we first met
Who would've thought
That three months from then
You'd have my heart in your bedroom set
But this is real
I walked you home in the snow
We shared a kiss
Who'd have thought our love would grow

Into something bigger, into something real
I swear now I'll never forget
The day of my life when I learnt what love meant
The day when we first met

I call your phone
And we talk in bed, at least for an hour or two
We say "goodbye"
And "I love you," then I dream my thoughts of you
You're my first thought in the morning and my last thought at night
And every thought during the day
I promise you baby
No one will ever take my love away

From the first time I saw you to the last time we spoke
My love for you has grown
And through these words that I sit here at night and write
I hope that I have shown

I love you.
#2
its a pretty personal song indeed! lol
i actually really liked it. altough im sure each stanza represents something that actually happened, its a really sweet song that could relate to many. good job! hope you got some mad head from the chick lol.

crit mine? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1066980
#3
I suppose it doesn't seem too personal on first glance, but there are quite a few lyrics in there that only my girlfriend and I would really understand from conversations we've had or events in our relationship. And yes, it's all based on real life.

Thanks for the comment, I'll return it.
#4
i like it.....but you had better mean EVERY word of it or it WILL come back and bite you right on the ass.
#5
Quote by somedude789
i like it.....but you had better mean EVERY word of it or it WILL come back and bite you right on the ass.

I'm sure I do. As I mentioned in the song, she's the first girl who's shown me what it truely means to love someone.

If you have any songs I'd be happy to return comments
#6
i like it i can somewhat relate. =D i have been with my girl for 1 year and 2 months now so im really happy =] she taught me what love is =] great song dude very ... i cant think of a word to describe it... a word that means connecting or relating to people... hmmm... its great lol nice job
#8
I wasn't going to read it just because any Valentine's Day song I've read has been really boring/cliché, but I actually enjoyed reading yours.

The build up in the end,

From the first time I saw you to the last time we spoke
My love for you has grown
And through these words that I sit here at night and write
I hope that I have shown

I love you.


is really good, except for the double reference of love(second line and last.)

It seems like it would work better if you saved 'love' for the last line because of that nice build up.

I really like it, and I'm sure your girlfriend will love it too.

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