#1
i need some help or ideas on how to finish this stanza. it is the first of the song, i have yet to define a certain rhyme scheme for it yet so, just kinda take this and run with it. please throw me any ideas you have.


black and white in a world of color
deafened by lightning and struck by thunder
lost in loneliness and found alone


thats all i have right now. im not sure about the last line, it can go if needed. but the first two i really like.
#4
black and white in a world of color
deafened by lightning and struck by thunder
lost in loneliness and found alone
the 3 lines above really make me groan.
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#5
black and white in a world of color
deafened by lightning and struck by thunder
lost in loneliness and found alone
if you found me here, would you take me home.

black and white in a world of color
deafened by lightning and struck by thunder
lost in loneliness and found alone
ill take a peep from beneath this stone.

black and white in a world of color
deafened by lightning and struck by thunder
lost in loneliness and found alone
this is the only life, iv ever known.

black and white in a world of color
deafened by lightning and struck by thunder
lost in loneliness and found alone
iv given up on chances blown.