#1
hi starting this thread so you have somewhere you can go if you have writers block. the idea is you help each other out with their songs and post what you have of your own songs and everyone helps you. you have to give to get basically.
#2
kk ive a song needs a lot of help tho

nobody cares
but they say they knew me
everyone stares
they just look strait through me
nobody knew i was even existing
till he day that i went missing

i was thinking at the end there putting like a placeboesque tweak on the missing
like in Nancey boy. its kinda hard to explain without having an example anyway thanks for the help.
this thread is gunna rock.
Last edited by grim reaper1 at Feb 16, 2009,
#3
Falling in love with what I hate,
Denying the world and my own fate,
is this is the end? are we really close to doom?
just waiting for the world to end with a boom
#4
Quote by grim reaper1
kk ive a song needs a lot of help tho

nobody cares
but they say they knew me
everyone cares they just look strait through me
nobody knew i was even existing
till he day that i went missing


i was thinking at the end there puttinglike a nirvanaesque weak on the missing
hard to explain in words.


i really like that part what ever you do keep that thats great so far really touching to me

Alone in a crowd
is where i stand
standing alone is all i know
the world will miss me when im gone
i like to think that but I know they'll all move on

hows that just kinda of came to me
#5
Falling in love with what I hate,
Denying the world and my own fate,
is this is the end? are we really close to doom?
just waiting for the world to end with a boom

i know the feeling on that line i just asked my ex to the prom (why the **** did i do that) but i used to love her then we fell out and i hated her (cant remember why too long ago) but i think i might be falling in love with her again but she's a bitch sometimes.

what about
thats when laughter turnes to tears
ive felt this way (over the years)
time fades but i remain (unchanged)

times are changing
tempers are raging
but i remain (unaging)

any help on how to improve this.