jpgilbert701
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Join date: Jul 2007
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#1
Ok so this song is definitely a departure from my usual style but I really like it. It's simple and straight forward but I think it's effective. I'm planning on recording an actual version of it within the next month as a project for school so that should be good.

Constructive crit only please.
Thanks for listening.
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Guernica.zip
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lordofthefood1
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Join date: Mar 2007
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#2
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Second: I shouldn't have

I loved this. It has a nice balance between the instruments and I can see where you get the "ish" from. I can practically hear Anthony singing something to it. My only complaint I guess is that it was kind of simple structurally, but that isn't necessarily a bad thing (just that it seemed like it literally went back and fourth the whole time. Perhaps there is a bridge, but I didn't catch it.)
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jpgilbert701
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Join date: Jul 2007
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#3
No there isn't. I'm planning on adding one because I had those exact same thoughts. It's good but...it's definitely simple as far as the arrangement goes.
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ninja.kitty
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Join date: Oct 2007
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#4
i can definately hear the circa survive in this. no doubt about it.

i think you need to add something else though, right now its just an intro, a chorus and a verse.

if you can add a bridge or have the second verse switch up or something, that would make it so much better.

this sounds good though man nice work

8/10

just cause it has so much potential