#1
Apologies for the last post, read the rules this time think this is alright

This is my first song - didnt really spend much time so its abit simple. Any criticisms/tips would be much appreciated:


Cutting the threads and smashing the chains
Breaking them down HO!
Cutting the threads and smashing the chains
I will never more be bound

As free as the fire
As free as the wind
Is what I desire to be

But with that desire
Comes pain burning bright
The confort of chains i still seek

Bound by the temptress
Pointless resistance
My downfall is assured

As free as the fire
As free as the wind
Is what I desire to be
#2
wish I could steal
"As free as the fire
As free as the wind
Is what I desire to be"

I think its awesome.

but suggestion:
AFter that bit i thought of something else
it could go

As free as the fire
As free as the wind
Is what I desire to be


As free as the fire
As free as the wind
As free as the waves in the se-ea

(Make sea last for two beats)
Tim.

You have entered the Twilight Zone
Beyond this world strange things are known
Use this key, unlock the door
See what your fate might have in store
Come explore your dreams' creation
Enter this world of imagination