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I know not many people go to this thread, but feedback would be appreciated

REVELATION

The T.V. told me there's bad people out there who carry knives and guns
The trains ain't safe nor the planes or the buses or the underground
Its a revelation to me
Its a revelation to me


The doctor told be to take these pills to take the blues away
stay away from fags and booze and don't forget to eat my five a day
Its a revelation to me
Its a revelation to me

CHORUS

So tell me of your suffering, I'll give you five minutes of fame
The germ has spread to your head by now and you'll never be the same
So tell me of your suffering I'll give you five minutes of fame
Why do you only tell the truth in a drunken haze...a daze.


My best friend told me not to worry so much and take it all in hand
lay off the drink and clean myself up, because its all worthwhile
Its a revelation to me
Its a revelation to me


*thats all I have so far*
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#2
so far, It's good. It really is. It's like an eye-opening slap in the face about reality in the beginning, then the chorus comes along, which I also really liked.

I'd love to see the rest once you finish it, man!
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