here's an earlier song of mine the lyric of which is a paraphrase of Ecclesiastes 12. This is the original musical arrangement but i am working on a later alternative which i hope to publish in the next week or so..


Remember now your creator
In days of your youth
Before the evil years draw in and surround you
And quench desire for the truth

Before the sun, the moon and all the stars are darkened
And the clouds return again after the rain
For in that day the watchmen tremble,
Mighty men grow weak
The windows all have been darkened
And the doors in every street
Have all been shut

Remember Him before the silver cord is broken
And the golden bowl lies crushed beneath it’s weight
The pitcher by the well has cracked
The wheel no longer turns
The dust returns into the earth
The spirit unto God
From whence it came

Good. A little scattered. I thought you some clever lines tho. Id say about a 7.5 out of 10
This is a bit darker than any of the few other pieces I have read from you. Of course, any worship music is ultimately joyful, but still . The imagery, especially in the last stanza, is very nice. Probably my favorite part of this overall. There are some tense issues here, but they are easily fixed. Overall, if your goal is to write above-average-quality worship songs, you do an excellent job. Sometimes I wish your pieces got more attention around here.