#1
Have you ever listened to the bees
Buzzing through the meadow?
Or wanted to fly with the breeze
And become a shadow?

Drifting in a dreamer’s world
Reality’s light years away
Swimming in the underworld
I think I might just stay.

Earth has become too corrupt
For me to live here alone.
I think I might just erupt.
And fall into the unknown.
Well my head may be stuck in the clouds
But at least I can see above the crowd.

Drifting in a dreamer’s world
Reality’s light years away
Swimming in the underworld
I think I might just stay.

Sitting in the mouth of the cave
Searching for my own place
Symphony of calming waves
Floating off into space
Hold onto this moment forever
I hope it never ends.

Drifting in a dreamer’s world
Reality’s light years away
Swimming in the underworld
I think I might just stay.

Have you ever listened to the bees
Buzzing through the meadow?
Or wanted to fly with the breeze
And become a shadow?


Butcher it up please!
#3
Ya.... The old ABAB system gets a little tiring, but it works to keep the flow going.

I kinda like where you were going with this, but there's something I gotta say, and I'm not trying to come off as offensive or anything, so don't take this the wrong way, but this kinda seems like stoner music, you know ?

Like, it's sorta set in this dreamy, pondering state with no real focus or story, just a bunch of thoughts thrown out. It's not bad, in fact I kinda like it, but I mighta liked it more if all the ideas were more connected or came together a bit more.... But hey, don't get me wrong, I can appreciate the scatterdness of it, its just not what gets me goin.
#4
this kinda seems like stoner music, you know ?
Yeah...if you had some kind of effects or trippy vocal phrasing it would be perfect for that kind of stuff...reminds me of SLEEP.