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Just lookin for a liil criticism! hope you enjoy.

"Haunting eyes, share familar memories of monsters and mice mocking our chivalry. Nocturnal youth rush in, subconciously praying for the light to give way, bringing the night, ending the day.

Warmth rises like the sun chasing cold winters away. Shining light on something new felt by the remaining few.
Yes we are young!
But does that stop the Sun?
This feeling knows no age
for the chemicals are all the same.

Flames still consume the young with desire. So pack your things and lets play in the fire. Let the flames lick at our feet from desires of sailing fleets. Because out hearts still beat.

Does our heart not beat? "