#1
My grandmother passed away recently and this song is really just for her, and how i felt after, its sad at parts, but it also has a hopeful atmosphere, and i felt alot better after her funeral, (alot of grief lifted) and i just wanted to see what you guys think, acoustic pieces aren't usually my thing.

C4C
Attachments:
These Atrocities I Have committed.zip
Poop.


Yes, poop.
#2
one question. why acoustic? I turned all the guitars electric and it sounded much more powerful. aside from a couple let ring difficulties, it was a lot better IMO.

just something to think about.
...Nothing you've ever...
...Planned on ever turned out...
...The way you planned...


...You're still disappointing them...
#4
i'm lovin the way you managed to sneak in some double bass drumming, hehe!


the intro- a little generic, but as soon as the drums kick, and there are two guitars playing indipendent rhythms then its good.
double bass bit- ooh i like it! sort of reminds me of an all that remains chorus.
bit jus after that- bit generic, but, oh well.
guitar complex bit- wow thats really, really nice. when the other guitar kicks in, the complexity is kinda ruined if its just playing boring chords. this is at bar34.
bar 38- another really good bit. awesome drums, nice harmonies between the guitars, too.
solo- sounds a bit like an electric solo, really. but, i dont know, maybe it works.
i love bar 59. its really sweet.
the harmony at bar 64, i really think doesnt work. ive played around with it though, cant really find anything that works better though. it jus doesnt really sound right.
overall- great song, must be really fun to play. good job, mate.
C4C? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1084725
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Last edited by Jake the Peg at Mar 10, 2009,