#1
Well, i wrote this sort of poem/lyrics yesterday, and i like it a lot, but i'm not sure if it's ready to be finished, and i was wondering if you awesome UGers could help me out with fine tuning my poem. Thanks in advance Also, it's supposed to be an acoustic.

Special
Yours words are blurry, they tell me nothing,
Can't figure you out, you're so special(so special)
Are you too good for me? I can't tell
I don't want to ask,
....and make it crumble!
What we have here... is special, it is special.

Give me a chance,
It will last forever,
Baby its fate,
Cause its simple as this,(pause all instruments)
What we have is special(special)

No courage, wont ask you your out-take
You know mine, yet yours is hidden (hidden)
Whats my problem? You make it so unclear,
I just can't read you,
I feel different than before.

Give me a chance,
It will last forever,
Baby its fate,
Cause its simple as this...
I'm Luke.
#2
who are you Jason Mraz?
Neverender:SSTB 4/19


Goddamn this cursed iron fist. When I lose control!


[quote="'[VictorinoX"]']You, sir, win epically.
#3
Quote by MasterExploder0
who are you Jason Mraz?

Nope, but i'm actually gonna take that as a compliment, was that supposed to be?

And yea, i guess you could say my style is close to his.
I'm Luke.
#4
So very far from a compliment buddy.
Neverender:SSTB 4/19


Goddamn this cursed iron fist. When I lose control!


[quote="'[VictorinoX"]']You, sir, win epically.
#5
Quote by MasterExploder0
So very far from a compliment buddy.

Ouch! Could you give me some pointers on where i can fix it? Or are you just not a big fan of the style? Thanks for your time either way
I'm Luke.
#6
Nah I'm not a great lyricist and I'm not a fan of the style. It comes off a little cheesy IMO but I think you could get a few BJ's out of it
Neverender:SSTB 4/19


Goddamn this cursed iron fist. When I lose control!


[quote="'[VictorinoX"]']You, sir, win epically.
#7
Quote by MasterExploder0
Nah I'm not a great lyricist and I'm not a fan of the style. It comes off a little cheesy IMO but I think you could get a few BJ's out of it

Haha thanks for your help
Anyone else?
I'm Luke.
#9
Quote by X_HIDRO_X
it sound pretty good..
it would fit the acoustic genre

Awesome, thanks soo much
I'm Luke.
#10
i helped write this ****tt.
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