#1
Well, I haven't posted anything in awhile, for I haven't really felt anything was really worthy. Then I just struggled to write them. BUT, then I discovered System Of A Down, and the way I looked at lyrics changed.
The title for this is debatable, it's either going to be The Freedom Train or Freedom In Slavery, help on this would be appreciated. Sing it like a Chili Pepper/Rage song. So here it is...

All aboard the freedom train!

Crushed by the freedom train out of hope tunnel
buried in the dirt for a cheap funeral
grow a worker pour water on the ashes
back to the field or you'll receive severe lashes
didn't you hear, what happened to the others?
don't you know I could just buy another?
are you aware of what the others do to theirs?
at least you get to breath clean fresh air

I have found freedom in slavery
there is freedom in slavery
I have found freedom in slavery
there is freedom in slavery

drink the sand of your desire
smoke the mirage can't get any higher
look in the sky, wish upon a star
break down the gate, but you won't get very far
the freedom train has left the track
you try to catch it I shoot you in the back
I had found freedom in slavery
you mistook stupidity as bravery

I have found freedom in slavery
there is freedom in slavery
I have found freedom in slavery
there is freedom in slavery

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#2
This is very good. I could definetely imagine this as SOAD, but it could probably fit with several other metal genres.

I really like the "Drink the sand of your desire" line.
#4
I really liked this piece and I just started listening to RCHP a couple of weeks ago but I could see them doing something like this. Its a very good piece and I didnt see any problems if you dont mind criting mine its in my sig as untitled thanks