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I wrote this in like 5 minutes. it's a bit cheesy but that's why I'm posting it so you guys can poke out the cheese for me and help me make this a nice song... crit for crit


Have you ever felt cheated out of fate?
Like you just wanna disappear, rewind then fade away
into the memories of times you spent wisely
wasting them with the best friend you knew too late

Do you ever feel like God didn't pay attention?
When he 'created' us both? I swear this is the most
unsatisfied I've ever been with this life
Where is the receipt? Gotta return and start over

Chorus
So don't let me go
please stay for a while
and never forget this

I dare you to tell me this ain't what it means to be
heartbroken in any way because this love's just a mistake
you tell me that and I'll take you to a priest because you
got a disease and there is no vaccination

Chorus

Bridge (This part is rapped, think feeling this by blink 182)
So call it just another bad case of bad timing
call me a wannabe singer that wants to try rhyming
tell me I'll get over this eventually
Tell me that my heart's blind but my brain can see
Tell me that life and love don't mean a thing
like saying being poor is living likea king
But I guess you don't know how it feels to be
happy for once, but thats taken away from me
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So don't let me go
please stay for a while
and never forget this

this stanza makes it sound kind of cheesy. good message but could be better worded


you tell me that and I'll take you to a priest because you
got a disease and there is no vaccination

this one also. but still good message


c4c? more than this in sig plz