#2
It was pretty good. Really liked the first riff. A bit more work with the bass would add something and the chorus was pretty generic i.e, just playing a note every 16th. Liked the solo 'cause it wasn't too OMGZ Chex oot my 1337 skillZ. Job well done.
#3
The solo needs moar OMGZ Chex oot my 1337 skillZ.

jk lol.

It's a neat little song, quite catchy. The only thing I'm not too fond of is that the second chorus comes a bit soon after the first one.
Maybe spice up the chorus as Geiger89 says, and you'll have a darn fine tune.

C4C?
Last edited by AA00P at Mar 10, 2009,
#5
The intro riff is pretty darn nice. The chorus is a bit generic/bland, as is the verse. The verse seems like it needs just a little bit more going on, though that might not be what you're going for. Regardless, the attached file's a suggestion.

Bar 12 is just your intro riff an octave up, plus a lead-in note. I fail at using GPro, so I have no idea how to get rid of the extra bars.

EDIT: The drums are the same (i.e. not adapted to the changed verse). I just left them in so it'd have some percussion behind it.
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Last edited by Athetosis at Mar 10, 2009,
#7
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The intro riff is pretty darn nice. The chorus is a bit generic/bland, as is the verse. The verse seems like it needs just a little bit more going on, though that might not be what you're going for. Regardless, the attached file's a suggestion.

Bar 12 is just your intro riff an octave up, plus a lead-in note. I fail at using GPro, so I have no idea how to get rid of the extra bars.

EDIT: The drums are the same (i.e. not adapted to the changed verse). I just left them in so it'd have some percussion behind it.


woah thanks! yeah ill try and incorporate some of those ideas into the verse and chorus. thanks
#9
i liked all the riffs but the chorus, the chorus kinda sounds like a pre-chorus, like its building up for something rather than being the main section of the song..
#10
Liked what you've done with the verse but I don't like the harmonies, I just don't like guitar harmonies at all so it isn't yours inparticular. The chorus was better but it still lacks umpf, I don't know, there's just something missing from it.
#11
very nice song. Everyting was together. The only thing that stuck out was the chorus. I could use some spicing up. Maybe changing up the rhythm?
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