#1
Before you start reading I thought i would give a little insight on the song, well mainly its about my girlfriend who killed herself.

The tears sear the pain from my mind
I don't know why it ended that way
And you still don't know who I am
So why don't you want to love me?
But now that its all over,
I don't think that you ever can

And I'm broken into a million
Cause that night ended all that we had
And now that your gone forever
I have to live all alone

Unlike the sinners and lovers could ever know
The love that I had huts me today
Now the rose has long passed away
But the pedals have yet to whither
But I know that it will someday
Until then, the thorn hurts me every way

And I'm broken into a million
Cause that night ended all that we had
And now that your gone forever
I yearn to see your face again
#2
Wow, I really like your third stanza, it really showes good imagery, and just flows well. Sorry about your loss man, hope it gets better.