#1
wrote this about 24hrs after i got dumped LOL

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Remember When our Love Was young, Been Soo Long and Now Its Done
The Start Came As Quick As The End, I Used To Think You Were My Godsend
You Made Me Smile From Day To Day, And make my fears go away

I Remember All We Used To Do..................(Hold Each Other ALl Night Long)
Its Just Soo Hard To Let Go Of You ......(When We Held Each Other, For The Last Time)
Since You've left i've hit soo many lows.....(TO The Bottom of The Bottle)
Its Just SOo Hard To let You Go.................(Our Hands Unlinked For The Last Time)
I guess you needed Sometime to breathe (You Said The Timing Was'nt Right)
Its Just Soo Hard To See you Leave...........(I Watch You Leave out Of The Door)
Now I Can See Past The Lies.....................(He's Won you Again, I Can Tell)
Buts It Just Soo Hard To Say Goodbye.......(Goodbye My Love)

You've Left Me with more, Questions than answers
When I Said i Loved You, Did You believe The Words I Said
I Believed all your promised and praises, and now all the questions it raises

I Remember All We Used To Do..................(Hold Each Other ALl Night Long)
Its Just Soo Hard To Let Go Of You ......(When We Held Each Other, For The Last Time)
Since You've left i've hit soo many lows.....(TO The Bottom of The Bottle)
Its Just SOo Hard To let You Go.................(Our Hands Unlinked For The Last Time)
I guess you needed Sometime to breathe (You Said The Timing Was'nt Right)
Its Just Soo Hard To See you Leave...........(I Watch You Leave out Of The Door)
Now I Can See Past The Lies.....................(He's Won you Again, I Can Tell)
Buts It Just Soo Hard To Say Goodbye.......(Goodbye My Love)

Its Just Soo Hard To Let Go Of You
Its Just SOo Hard To let You Go
Its Just Soo Hard To See you Leave
Its Just Soo Hard To Say Goodbye
The End Was Soo Unexpected
Last edited by Mcleody at Mar 15, 2009,
#3
ahh dude that sucks for ya, rachel's are always heartbreakers, i would know. this is a pretty good way of putting yourself in a deeper hole of misery tho. But there seems to be more to it, an ex from her past i take it?

"He's won you again, I can tell"


Rough one dude, much sympathy
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#4
Remember When our Love Was young, Been Soo Long and Now Its Done
The Start Came As Quick As The End, I Used To Think You Were My Godsend
You Made Me Smile From Day To Day, And make my fears go away
Rhyming feels forced, lyrics don't really mean much to me...

I Remember All We Used To Do..................(Hold Each Other ALl Night Long)
Its Just Soo Hard To Let Go Of You ......(When We Held Each Other, For The Last Time)
Since You've left i've hit soo many lows.....(TO The Bottom of The Bottle)
Its Just SOo Hard To let You Go.................(Our Hands Unlinked For The Last Time)
I guess you needed Sometime to breathe (You Said The Timing Was'nt Right)
Its Just Soo Hard To See you Leave...........(I Watch You Leave out Of The Door)
Now I Can See Past The Lies.....................(He's Won you Again, I Can Tell)
Buts It Just Soo Hard To Say Goodbye.......(Goodbye My Love)
Reasonable chorus, but still I'm not seeing a point to the lyrics in themselves.

You've Left Me with more, Questions than answers
When I Said i Loved You, Did You believe The Words I Said
I Believed all your promised and praises, and now all the questions it raises
Rhyme in the last line felt forced, again you're telling us as compared to showing it...

I Remember All We Used To Do..................(Hold Each Other ALl Night Long)
Its Just Soo Hard To Let Go Of You ......(When We Held Each Other, For The Last Time)
Since You've left i've hit soo many lows.....(TO The Bottom of The Bottle)
Its Just SOo Hard To let You Go.................(Our Hands Unlinked For The Last Time)
I guess you needed Sometime to breathe (You Said The Timing Was'nt Right)
Its Just Soo Hard To See you Leave...........(I Watch You Leave out Of The Door)
Now I Can See Past The Lies.....................(He's Won you Again, I Can Tell)
Buts It Just Soo Hard To Say Goodbye.......(Goodbye My Love)

Its Just Soo Hard To Let Go Of You
Its Just SOo Hard To let You Go
Its Just Soo Hard To See you Leave
Its Just Soo Hard To Say Goodbye
The End Was Soo Unexpected
Like the feel of things decaying, getting lost in chaos here- still doesn't really do much for me though.

C4C?
#5
This is pretty cliche, I honestly didnt see anything original in it, but I know what your going through and you dont really care about how good it is, you just need to get it out of your system if you dont mind criting my newest piece realm of forever, I would appericate it, theres a link in my sig
#6
I'm pissed off... that's my girlfriend's name.

Not the point. Um, it's... radio friendly?

Sorry bro, REALLY can't feel the emotion. It is hard to write though. A for effort. Keep working on it dude.
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touche sir.
#7
Ok Guys i've redone the verses (im keeping the chorus cos the syllables of the words not in brackets kinda fits well with the music :S if theres any ideas on how to best change the words im open to ideas? ) let me know if you prefer these verses or the previous ones

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The Words i Did not Wish To Hear, They Brought Around My Ever Fear
They Deafen me Like a Leer, Im Trying To Hold Back The Tears
This End Is unforseen, i never knew you could be soo mean
My Heart Is Bleeding From The Seams, You've Awoke Me From My Dream
My Heart Slows, Almost To Break, Opening up Was my Mistake

I Remember All We Used To Do..................(Hold Each Other ALl Night Long)
Its Just Soo Hard To Let Go Of You ......(When We Held Each Other, For The Last Time)
Since You've left i've hit soo many lows.....(TO The Bottom of The Bottle)
Its Just SOo Hard To let You Go.................(Our Hands Unlinked For The Last Time)
I guess you needed Sometime to breathe (You Said The Timing Was'nt Right)
Its Just Soo Hard To See you Leave...........(I Watch You Leave out Of The Door)
Now I Can See Past The Lies.....................(He's Won you Again, I Can Tell)
Buts It Just Soo Hard To Say Goodbye.......(Goodbye My Love)

what have i done mon cherrie? Is it enought to say im sorry?
take a look at me now and what do you see? a once strong man is now debris
Its was In You that I Confide, i only Wished To be By Your Side
And Now I Feel Like the love has Died, I'll Take My Heart And Hide
The Final Straw, Has Been Drawn,
My Hearts Been Torn, Pierced by your Thorn

I Remember All We Used To Do..................(Hold Each Other ALl Night Long)
Its Just Soo Hard To Let Go Of You ......(When We Held Each Other, For The Last Time)
Since You've left i've hit soo many lows.....(TO The Bottom of The Bottle)
Its Just SOo Hard To let You Go.................(Our Hands Unlinked For The Last Time)
I guess you needed Sometime to breathe (You Said The Timing Was'nt Right)
Its Just Soo Hard To See you Leave...........(I Watch You Leave out Of The Door)
Now I Can See Past The Lies.....................(He's Won you Again, I Can Tell)
Buts It Just Soo Hard To Say Goodbye.......(Goodbye My Love)

Its Just Soo Hard To Let Go Of You
Its Just SOo Hard To let You Go
Its Just Soo Hard To See you Leave
Its Just Soo Hard To Say Goodbye
The End Was Soo Unexpected
#8
anyone? gonna be recording this on wedensday so i could really use the urgent help!