#1
I thought I'd pop in this forum and get some criticism for the pieces I have been working on. I don't have a band so anything that is in these tabs is purely written by myself. I'm 17 years old and have been playing for 4 years without any lessons in guitar or theory.

Open Your Mind:
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/attachment.php?attachmentid=74103&stc=1

Alchemical Centrifuge:
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/attachment.php?attachmentid=74104&stc=1

Mental Degredation:
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/attachment.php?attachmentid=74105&stc=1

Dillusional Redemption:
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/attachment.php?attachmentid=74106&stc=1

Tech Death Experiment:
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/attachment.php?attachmentid=74107&stc=1
Attachments:
Open Your Mind.gp5
Alchemical Centrifuge.gp5
Mental Degredation.gp5
Dillusional Redemption.gp5
tech death experiment.gp5
Last edited by Niko_k at Mar 18, 2009,
#2
I only listened to 'Open Your Mind'

It sounds alot like Symphony X to me, neoclassical metal with hints of prog thrown in.
Only major concern is that the transitions were shaky, too sudden, like a starting one sentance without finished the preceding one (Would you like to go- Saturday night at the ballpark...) just kind of broken.
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#3
Some of the composition does sound quiet nice, but some of the riffs feel like that there just thrown in, maybe cause of the drums randomly appear in and out i dont no but the art of song writing is the ability to mold ideas so that they flow,
#4
My main problem is making things flow and transition properly...I really can't grasp how I can make some of my writing sound properly constructed, my lack of lessons may attribute to this..
#5
Its all obviously practice, but that seems to be the only flaw i could come across
Maybe what you could do is hum your music, and if u find yourself struggling from one transition to another stop the song, hum and try hum like a bridging section and the transpose that
#6
So I guess my only flaw so far is working on making things flow. What are some useful techniques or tips that I could apply to my songs to help bars flow into eachother more smoothly...

Also what did you guys think of bars 54-79 in Open Your Mind?
#7
I love the arpeggio progression, Nice time sig as well be a mind **** to count out and play rhythmically properly.

Turn down the string section around Bars 60, the unisons its just a tad to loud, and then just suddenly stops
#8
Thanks I boggled my own mind with that progression, it took me forever to figure out which time signature it fit into.

Sorry about the volumes, I wanted the strings to be a value lesser than the guitar...oops!
#10
I'm going to slowly work on fixing my transitions, maybe ring things into the other bars or a little riff to make the transition flow more smoothly...

Any ideas?