#1
Dear Benny,

Put me to sleep,
I've been a bad dog.

When that kid walked up
and gave me a pat on the head,
he wasn't asking for it;
I was baiting him.

I've got so much aggression
building up inside my bones.

I try to bury them
in the yard and forget,
but I always know
their secret hiding places.

You didn't give me enough attention,
so I peed on the rug.
Next time you leave for a week
I'll turn the kitchen into a cesspool.

Perhaps you're trying to escape
the burden I've become.
Just leave me outside,
I'll run straight into oncoming traffic.

I've got so much depression
decaying inside my bones.

I try to bury them
in the yard and forget,
but I always know
their secret hiding places.

You didn't hit me because you hate me,
you did it because I'm a horrible companion.
Yet, you say you still love me.
How
can
this
be?

Why won't you kill me?
I am aggressive.
I am depressed.
It is my fault that you don't love yourself anymore.

Love,
Bruiser
Lord Gold feeds from your orifices and he wants to see you sweat.
Lord Gold probes you publicly and makes your pussy wet.
Now say his name.....
#3
Very, very interesting premise though I'm not sure the writing itself lives up to the idea behind the poem. I think you should condense this a bit, make it more focused, a little less obvious -- and I think it could definitely be very impressive.
#4
Quote by SilenceEvolves
Very, very interesting premise though I'm not sure the writing itself lives up to the idea behind the poem. I think you should condense this a bit, make it more focused, a little less obvious -- and I think it could definitely be very impressive.

What does it say to you? I don't see anything obvious, I wrote it from a pit bull terrier to his master/friend. I really want to see what you think about it though, I'm interested in what is supposed to be obvious.
Lord Gold feeds from your orifices and he wants to see you sweat.
Lord Gold probes you publicly and makes your pussy wet.
Now say his name.....