#1
Hey, our band just recorded our first song, could you guys please look at it and tell us what you think? Please give constructive criticism: www.myspace.com/blackoutau

Thanks
Last edited by Raptor94 at Mar 21, 2009,
#2
its ok, the singer doesnt show any emotion, just monotone, like he isnt getting into it, and also the sound doesnt seem to build up its just plateau from to start to finish.
Last edited by Martindecorum at Mar 21, 2009,
#3
the riff sounds exactly the same as the intro to jesus of suburbia
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#4
Quote by Martindecorum
its ok, the singer doesnt show any emotion, just monotone, like he isnt getting into it, .


+1 and couple times the drums went out of time
#5
What do you think about this comment?

got to say thats was ****ing sweeeeet
jamie-solo needs to work on
matt-let jamie do the solos
chris-tad softer
jimi-louder
my opion but all together that was sweet as bros

just fyi jamie = guitar, matt (me) = bass, chris, = drummer, jamie = vocals
#6
line 1 - not a physic, but hes your friend aye
line 2 - true
line 3 - I dont know whos better
line 4 - not so true, level seemed alright
line 5 - not so true, just needs reverb or soemthing
line 6 - true
#7
Quote by Martindecorum
line 1 - not a physic, but hes your friend aye
line 2 - true
line 3 - I dont know whos better
line 4 - not so true, level seemed alright
line 5 - not so true, just needs reverb or soemthing
line 6 - true


I think line 3 was suggesting that bassists shouldnt solo
#8
Quote by Martindecorum
line 1 - not a physic, but hes your friend aye
line 2 - true
line 3 - I dont know whos better
line 4 - not so true, level seemed alright
line 5 - not so true, just needs reverb or soemthing
line 6 - true


I think line 3 was suggesting that bassists shouldnt solo
#9
The singer sounds bored, the riff is pretty dull...song dragged on and onnnn.

You really need to think of structuring better, there was only one repeated riff for the whole song. Goes out of time a couple of places too.

Needs a lot more energy, and better balance, also, demand that your singer sings with some balls and energy.
#11
the song is not in time.

the song speeds up and slows down even though it is the same riff (but not like double time).

a lot of bad notes.

guitar solo is sloppy and needs a lot of work.

singer is way out of key and doesn't sound very good. It sounds like he is close, but just needs a lot of work.

the songwriting is pretty boring. When you write a song you really need to focus on writing some hooks, something that will grab the listeners ears and draw them in.

but that being said, **** it man, just keep working at it and having fun, good things will come
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#12
the singer needs emotion
your guitar tone needs a lot of improvement... reminds me of when lil wayne tries to play a solo ( link )

and the drums + bass don't work together
possible potential but it's not that great tbh
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#13
Honestly I think you're better off with a metronome than that drummer, just sayin'
#14
I'd suggest maybe changing your name. There's already a relatively succesful UK band called the Blackout. They suck, but that's irrelevant.
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