#1
I'm apply for this job and I need to also hand in a cover letter with my resume. I got most of the cover letter done except I'm not sure how to close it.

Is this alright?

" It would be in my best interest if I can have and oppertunity to work for your department. I will follow up soon, in hopes of arranging a time to meet.

Thank-you for your time

Sincerely

Mike"

I know people are gonna ask what the job is, it's a summer student job given out by the town to cut grass and to a bunch of town maintnance. Pays $10-$15\hr and 40hrs a week!
#2
That's pretty bad man, makes you sound foregin. I think a cover letter is meant to tell them something about your experience and why you want the job.

Also it's an opportunity
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#3
Foreign? lol Also this is only the closing line not the whole thing. I stated my work experience and skills in the real once I have saved on my computer.
#4
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#5
Yeh man, it just doesn't sound like something anyone would say if speaking. Fair enough you want to sound professional, but I think you over shot and landed in Eastern Europe lol, if you tone it down a bit it should be good though
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Quote by Yorkville
I'm apply for this job and I need to also hand in a cover letter with my resume. I got most of the cover letter done except I'm not sure how to close it.

Is this alright?

" It would be in my best interest if I can have the opportunity to work for your department. I will follow up soon, in hopes of arranging a time to meet.

Thank you
for your time

Sincerely

Mike"

I know people are gonna ask what the job is, it's a summer student job given out by the town to cut grass and to a bunch of town maintnance. Pays $10-$15\hr and 40hrs a week!


FIXED spelling and grammar.
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How about this then:

For summer 2009 I hope that I may be given the opportunity to work for the Durham Works Department.

Thank you for your time
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Where do you work? I might apply
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#11
"In my best interest"? Makes you sound self centered and selfish.

Try:

"I would appreciate an opportunity to work with your team and look forward to meeting with you soon for an interview."
#12
Quote by Yorkville
I'm apply for this job and I need to also hand in a cover letter with my resume. I got most of the cover letter done except I'm not sure how to close it.

Is this alright?

" It would be in my best interest if I can have and oppertunity to work for your department. I will follow up soon, in hopes of arranging a time to meet.

Thank-you for your time

Sincerely

Mike"

I know people are gonna ask what the job is, it's a summer student job given out by the town to cut grass and to a bunch of town maintnance. Pays $10-$15\hr and 40hrs a week!


First of all, spelling mistakes are a big no.

There is no - between the thank and you.

Its worded very awkwardly, realistically, it needs to be rewritten.

When writing a formal letter, there are 2 ways to sign off. Faithfully and Sincerely. Sincere is when you know the person, and faithfully is if you dont. AFAIK, faithfully would better suit your circumstances
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"In my best interest"? Makes you sound self centered and selfish.

Try:

"I would appreciate an opportunity to work with your team and look forward to meeting with you soon for an interview."


That's what I thought too, just didnt know how to reword it. Thanks!
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#16
Also one more question. Who should you address the cover letter to if you don't know the name of the manager or whoever looks at the covr letter\resumes?
#17
If it's to the city - I would address is to:

Human Resources - Temporary Staffing

And then on the initial salutation, just use:

"Dear Sir/Madam,"

But ideally try to find out, maybe make a few calls and see if you can get some guidance.
#19
I think this suggestion is the best i've seen, its about the same as i would have made mine.


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"In my best interest"? Makes you sound self centered and selfish.

Try:

"I would appreciate an opportunity to work with your team and look forward to meeting with you soon for an interview."
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But ideally try to find out, maybe make a few calls and see if you can get some guidance.

This is the best way to do it. Call the company, find out the name of the person who will read the letter. If you were in their position, looking to pick people for interviews and only a couple had bothered doing that, then who would you pick?
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This is the best way to do it. Call the company, find out the name of the person who will read the letter. If you were in their position, looking to pick people for interviews and only a couple had bothered doing that, then who would you pick?


ok I just called them, she said it will go to a few people so I can't give a specific name She told me to just wirte: HR Manager, Works Department.
#23
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ok I just called them, she said it will go to a few people so I can't give a specific name She told me to just wirte: HR Manager, Works Department.

Well, at least you know that's their policy.

I know most Graphics Studios won't pay any attention to a CV and cover letter that isn't addressed to the right person, but then they tend to be smaller companies.
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