#1
wrote this a while ago, never finished it. I know it's generic (hence the title) and I know it's cliche so try to avoid telling me that.
any ideas on how to make it a better generic teen pop song would be appreciated.
c4c

Generic Pop Song

Afraid of my own happiness
Addicted to the fall
A sucker for the silver words
Of an Angel standing tall

I'm a self-defeating narcissist
I'm an empty reservoir
I should be writing songs to tear you down
Instead of coming back for more

I got a
Text message that I probably shouldn't even have read
Shallow words that you probably shouldn't even have said
It won't hurt him babe, he doesn't ever have to know
I'm parked outside. Want you bad. Ready, set, GO!
I want Super Saiyan abilities
#2
Quote by rebelmidget
wrote this a while ago, never finished it. I know it's generic (hence the title) and I know it's cliche so try to avoid telling me that.
any ideas on how to make it a better generic teen pop song would be appreciated.
c4c

Generic Pop Song

Afraid of my own happiness
Addicted to the fall
A sucker for the silver words
Of an Angel standing tall

I'm a self-defeating narcissist
I'm an empty reservoir
I should be writing songs to tear you down
Instead of coming back for more

I got a
Text message that I probably shouldn't even have read
Shallow words that you probably shouldn't even have said
It won't hurt him babe, he doesn't ever have to know
I'm parked outside. Want you bad. Ready, set, GO!


The ending (bolded) sticks out to me. It almost seems awkward to me, I mean like after the first two verses. The first two are good, I think.
#3
Good, but if you're into writing "teen pop", you actually need to dumb it down a bit. I haven't ever heard a miley cirus song with the words narcissist or reservoir. Also, just talk about girl problems. Not much I can say that's wrong with this except that it's a bit too deep for the genre you're writing for. Teens like to be told what to think when they listen to music(which is kinda ironic, considering the general attitude of teenagers).
Today I feel electric grey
I hope tomorrow, neon black