#1
There are only certain things in your life
you reveal to your friends:

the colours that waned, the
iniquity that early soul-searching became, the
moments of depression and anxiety that
amplified through the cecity.

for not everyone sees the honesty, and not
all want to admit they feel the same...

“but I'm standing right here in front of you
naked, cold and dewed;
can't you see me?
these arched shoulders and these
dog-eared love folders?

I'm ashamed...
but contented,
for the closeness of the country is where the
brunette Desirees and the blonde Dawns
gather to mourn the red-headed flame that
died one morning in need of warmth.
it was the fair and the malefic one that killed a tradition;
that slew my confidence in myself and my friends.
the nine year old girl I'm saving myself for would
never do that....

and now I'm red in the face

but I'll endure.
#2
I was going to critique your other one, but this one's new, so I suppose I'll do it.

There are only certain things in your life
you reveal to your friends:

the colours that waned, the
iniquity that early soul-searching became, the
moments of depression and anxiety that
amplified through the cecity.
I like this a lot. It has impeccable flow, and worked beautifully in my mind. The two bits above it, however, seem to have very little relation to it. Also, I don't neccessarily like the way that you have "the" at the end of all the lines, and/or "that." I can still envision the flow, but I like it better at the beginning of the next line. It seems to much an attempt at being poetic.

for not everyone sees the honesty, and not
all want to admit they feel the same...

“but I'm standing right here in front of you
naked, cold and dewed;
can't you see me?
these arched shoulders and these
dog-eared love folders?"
This is much better, in context of relation, and it's definitely more emotional than the first part, in my opinion. Personally, I can relate to it very easily. I think that "can't you see me?" is unneccessary, however, as well as the second "these."

I'm ashamed...
but contented,
for the closeness of the country is where the
brunette Desirees and the blonde Dawns
gather to mourn the red-headed flame that
died one morning in need of warmth.
it was the fair and the malefic one that killed a tradition;
that slew my confidence in myself and my friends.
the nine year old girl I'm saving myself for would
never do that....
This is a bit of a change of pace for me from the others, but I like that variation. Thank God that you used red-headed instead of ginger, however, because ginger would NOT fit in the serious tone of this piece. I think that "headed" is awkward still though - maybe just red by itself. The last two lines required a couple reads for me to understand.

and now I'm red in the face

but I'll endure.
Decent ending, although a bit anticlimactic. I don't enjoy it as much as the rest.

Overall though, this piece was a really good read. You convey serious mastery of language, and I just tried to point out the most minor flaws.
#3
This piece seems to be full of passion and emotion. The way i saw it was that there is much feeling put into it. I like it. The only question i have is what does cecity mean? I've never heard that word before. The only thing i did not like in this piece was the very first line. It doesn't seem to have the same feel as everything else. But thats just my opinion.
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The 5th paragraph is very powerful. Nice choice of words there.