#1
It's got kind of a strange structure but i was really kind of going for that.

Also the lyrics were written to kind of set the mood so if you can't understand them, which you probably won't they aren't the main focus of the song.

Anyway any critique is awesome. I want ideas for the beginning because it feels bare, as much as i want it to lead up to the ending chorus i think it could use something during the verses.

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/default.cfm?bandID=602364&content=music

http://www.myspace.com/alancorbinmusic

called "Not The Way".

Let me know what you think.
#2
i like it man. I don't really think the beginning needs much. the song evolves in an interesting way. What tuning are you in those strings sound real loose? i like yours stuff. check me out at http://myspace.com/stayhella and i'd love to go back and forth on some critques and advice and stuff. later man
#3
love the acoustic riff, i think the intro is fine, but something that you could do is, while the vocals sound good in tune, i cannot understand a lyric your saying, but the chorus is great. the keys in the backround are also a great touch. well put together overall good song, and just a little tid bit, to reduce the buzz in the begging and end just slience that part of the track up until where the song starts. A suggestion for a into could be just single notes or just a slower/ partial part of the main riff. great job though

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#4
Quote by the.eliminator
i like it man. I don't really think the beginning needs much. the song evolves in an interesting way. What tuning are you in those strings sound real loose? i like yours stuff. check me out at http://myspace.com/stayhella and i'd love to go back and forth on some critques and advice and stuff. later man


Thanks, i actually normally keep my acoustic a step and a half down with 14's on it but it's capoed at the 2nd fret. i will check out your myspace and add you in the near future.