#1
Hey Guys,

For the past few months I've been composing this piece of music.
The song is semi-finished and now I'm seeking some criticism.
There are a few parts of the song which needs fixing, for example:

- The vocal track is a rush job, recorded in Adobe Audition w/ voice reduction and distortion filters.
- The solo has alot of out-of-pitch bends.
- Also I think the drum track needs fixing w/ fills/breaks.

Anyways here it is:

Title: Ragnarok
Song Synopsis: World Destruction
MP3 Sample: Click Here
Lyrics:

[VERSE]

it's getting too dark to see
in a world of dying need
consternation ri-
sing

can barely live to breathe
why can't anyone hear me?
death is on its way
yeah

[CHORUS]

with these dreams

everything's a dream
everything's a scene
to do

the darkness in your fears
the sorrow in your tears
you do

[VERSE]

the earth is going to shake
and death's the new cliche
don't know if I can take
this

the terror of fear and hunger
will reign like external thunder
death is on its way
yeah

[CHORUS] (repeat)


Any criticism would be greatly appreciated,
Many thanks in advance.
Last edited by stabbsy at Jun 29, 2009,
#3
Whats the point of this song? Is it what someone would feel if the world was ending? Also explain external thunder. Also to have a terror of fear sounds like your afraid of being afraid. Finally my last question would be what is the hunger for? Or is it literally hunger for food?
Last edited by Nike-Man at Jun 29, 2009,
#4
hey Nike-Man,
Thx for the speedy reply.

The songs synopsis I always referred to was World Destruction, like a doomsday setting, or a unforeseen risk to human civilisation.

Do you really think this song is worth selling? ... wow