That was good. The only thing I have to say is near the end, where you start hitting notes and sliding down roughly 0:34 I think you should of hit each note once more before sliding to the next one.
Seemed a little rushed to me. But otherwise it was good.
My guitar build

My gear:
Blackheart Little Giant Combo
Epiphone Les Paul with Rio Grande TX/BBQ pickup set
Little Big Muff
Blues Driver