I like the half time feel at bar 13, very effective. I also LOVE that riff in bar 24! The rhythm is variable enough to keep interest while not being too insane to detract from the song, so kudos there too. And the dynamic range is great!

But I don't think hand claps are appropriate in this metal song (bar 20), and I think some sections should not necessarily be repeated as it sometimes gives it a feel of predictability.

When your guitars do their tremolo bar stuff I reckon they should be playing atleast two notes as it sounds a bit thin otherwise. I would end the song on a massive metal chord, personally.

With improvements this could be really cool!
Don't know what to make of this.

bar 16-18 = random notes? Seems like it to me anyways, as if no thought were put into writing that section.

Riff at bar 19 is good though

I can't give this song a score, like I said, don't know what to make of this one. What was up w/ the clapping sound for drums lol, was not expecting that.

crit one of mine? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1154297
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Yeah you really need to work on your drums.. There is just no rhythm...that's all i can say.
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