#1
Here's something new I just thought up. Critics please.

Regretting You

Ill always remember the day that we met,
You seemed fine and you looked fine, too.
I thought it would last forever,
But now I feel the burden of regret.

[Chorus]:
Memories of regret, stories of regret,
Nights of regret, I wish we never met. (x2)

The light in your eyes, was really full of lies, and
Smell of your hair has led me to despair.
I never should've kissed you that night,
I never should've kissed you that night..

[Chorus] x2
___________

And thats it. Im open to suggestions. Peace.
Last edited by fret_racer82 at Jul 1, 2009,
#2
Sweet. Thats really good, I'd be proud of that, Keep it up.
'The Blues is Easy to Play, but Hard to Feel'
Jimi Hendrix
#3
I liked it. It might be better with another verse just to make it a little longer but from what is written here, it sounds pretty good! C4C? If you could look at the last link in my sig. that would be great. Thanks
#4
I liked it as well. The lyrics are straightforward and all but explicit lyrics can make amazing songs as well. I think a lot of this song's emotion is gonna come from the music that'sput to it and the way you sing it. If you ever record it, I'd love to hear it.
here, My Dear, here it is
#5
Thanks for the feedback! This will be acoustic or have a nice 'softer' to 'moderate' rock feel to it.
I will eventually record this song, after I add the next verse.

I am still open to suggestions.


Quote by muel333
I liked it. It might be better with another verse just to make it a little longer but from what is written here, it sounds pretty good! C4C? If you could look at the last link in my sig. that would be great. Thanks


What about the last link?