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This is the first song I have ever written and I know nothing about songwriting. Of course I read through the faq a bit but I have seriously no idea if this song is good or bad.

The music itself is already done, link is the last one in my sig.
I am german and still in school, so it is even more difficult for me to write decent lyrics.
It is basically about a dead person, trying to tell the best friend to go on and live happy instead of being depressed about the death. Any suggestions are welcome

C4C as always

Verse 1
remember those good times
so long ago 
we still can think     this means that the dead guy is still somehow "living", 
(we) still can breathe      looking for a better word here
dont try to spin
the wheel again 
you have to see
the truth 

Chorus 1
Vanished into the dark
watching you in solitude
still connected, banded together
separated by emptiness        maybe another word for emptiness, something that 
                                             describes the afterlife
Fill 1

Verse 2
we were more than friends
more than brothers 
bury the past
and face the future
sweep aside
all the sorrow 
(and)let your life
sprout again

Chorus 2
Vanished into the dark
watching you in solitude
still connected, banded together
separated by emptiness 

Solo

Chorus 3
Vanished into the dark
forever following you
still connected, banded together
be strong	go on
 
Break

Outro
be strong 
go on
(╯°□°)╯︵ ┻━┻
Last edited by thorbor at Jul 3, 2009,