#1
Hey you lovely S&L people

This is my first post in here so i'm apologize tenfold if i break any rules.

Now, this is a piece i've just written. It's not my first song but it is in a series i've written recently that i've try to experiment with. My only concern is that is too generic. So it'd be much appreciated if you could give it a read and tell me what you think.

Lots of Love Matt
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Sunday:

Sunday takes it all away,
Sunday makes life all ok,
Watch the people walking by,
Watch the clouds in the sky.

Where do these animals eat their dead?
Where do these two minds intersect?
Why do these windows seem like walls?

Sunday takes it all away,
Sunday makes life all ok,
Watch the people rolling by,
Watch the people in the sky.

Why are they at each others throat?
Have I done wrong am I at fault?
Why are the moments giving way?

Sunday cuts me away,
Sunday lasts come what may,
Sunday holds me in her arms,
She won't drop me down to them.

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#2
I just have to say the contrast between the first chorus and the first verse caught me off guard... It started all happy and nice and then "Where do these animals eat their dead"

Actually, I'm still confused about the whole mood of this song
Originally Posted by happytimeharry
Your avatar is creepy, yet incredibly hypnotic...

I do what I can

Originally Posted by FiNNi
@AlterEdge: On a side note, I laughed when I noticed pedobear was your avatar

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#3
Quote by AlterEdge
I just have to say the contrast between the first chorus and the first verse caught me off guard... It started all happy and nice and then "Where do these animals eat their dead"

Actually, I'm still confused about the whole mood of this song


I wondered if i should explain that but in my head it was meant to be choruses as sunny days then verse as darker stormy things.
its quite hard convey without the music or anything but its kind of moody melacholy


and awesome avatar
#4
Quote by Frooshy
I wondered if i should explain that but in my head it was meant to be choruses as sunny days then verse as darker stormy things.
its quite hard convey without the music or anything but its kind of moody melacholy


and awesome avatar


Oh, okay I can see that now. Yeah, I just had to stretch the ol' imagination a bit. I totally understand it now. I do quite like the idea though. Haha, ya and Pedobear FTW!
Originally Posted by happytimeharry
Your avatar is creepy, yet incredibly hypnotic...

I do what I can

Originally Posted by FiNNi
@AlterEdge: On a side note, I laughed when I noticed pedobear was your avatar

Me too... me too...