#1
"Our Days, Our Nights, Our World"

i cant believe
that we've made it this far,
with nothing more
than a few scars.
please.
dont let them fade away.
they're the only proof we have...
that this was real,
and that we can feel,
anything at all!

these days are our days to waste!

so let the road you're on
take you home.
and i swear, i'll be by your side
when you're all alone.

all of the world is ours!

live.
and have no regrets.
love yourself.
and dont forget
who
you
are...

i cant believe
that we've made it this far,
with nothing more
than a few scars.
please.
dont let them fade away.
they're the only proof we have...
that this was real,
and that we can feel,
anything at all!

these days are our days.
and all of the world is ours.
these nights are our nights
and noone can take them away.

these days are our days.
and all of the world is ours.
these nights are our nights
and noone can take them away.

these days are our days.
and all of the world is ours.
these nights are our nights
and noone can take them away!


thanks, be honest.
#2
Good flow and rhyming, but it's got a lot of cliches. It would certainly make a good song with the appropriate music, but it's just stock. The one part that felt like it was really yours was, "These days are our days to waste." You just have to find your own way to express things. Use more colorful words, really think about what concept you want to portray for each stanza, and don't be afraid to sound a little "off."

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