Here's a song I wrote:

There she stood in front of me
Skin soft- body bare
Her eyes speak of nothing but
A mindful eye that wasn't there
Her lips move her body gyres
Hypnotized robotic stare

Adrenaline feeds
A testosterone high
Instinct feeds
Animal awry

....And in the mood I saw a flash
Of what was before me
Not long ago she was a queen
Young face a-light with a dream
My heavy heart began to bleed
Washed away this candid scene


Do I stay?
Do I turn away?
How did you come to this?
With your eyes blank
and your body bare?


I feel like some parts the language is too strong or whimsical it it just becomes melodramatic or sappy. I don't know tell me what you think...
Led Zeppelin, Pearl Jam, Jimi Hendrix, Nirvana, Radiohead, Black Sabbath, Oasis, Cream, Pixies, Soundgarden, The Who, The Beatles, Peter Green, U2
Last edited by RevGen88 at Jul 8, 2009,