#2
it was okay. i got allot of feedback/almost clipping sound. it drug on a little. if you changed it up a little bit it would be better. mix up the rythem, or pauase a few seconds, just mix it up. it all flowed tegether to much. it needs a re-write, but it does have potential. keep at it.

crit mine? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?p=20656880#post20656880