It's a pretty cool song, I too dig it. It has a lesser quality, but I think it kinda works for the song so I'm not sure if that's what you were going for.
the first riff it's simple but effective, the vocal looks horrible but maybe for the quality, i suggest you to make more riffs to make more interesting the song.
A thing you can do it's making a clean verse and a strong chorus, a usual style in grunge
overall creative but needs more structuring

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