andrew12398
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Join date: Aug 2006
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#1
Finished it.

Tell me what you think? Doesn't need to be a full crit.
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Last edited by andrew12398 at Jul 18, 2009,
sam b
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Join date: Nov 2003
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#2
I dont listen to the genre, but it sounds like Metalcore to me

The clean intro worked well. The only thing I could suggest (a tiny thing) is add some hammer ons to.. vary it a bit. Like in bar 4 hammer on the 2 3 and 5.

The first distortion riff is good. The harmony works really well and it leads nicely into the next riff at 30.

One thing I will say is I think that riff (at 30) would be better if it went down a key at bar 34. Especially with the drums changing.


Good start, wouldnt mind hearing it finished (if you're going to)

9/10 for what you have so far.


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AustinxAtomic
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Join date: Feb 2008
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#3
I like the clean part, but once distortion kicks in... it's too metalcore..
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andrew12398
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Join date: Aug 2006
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#4
Quote by sam b
I dont listen to the genre, but it sounds like Metalcore to me

The clean intro worked well. The only thing I could suggest (a tiny thing) is add some hammer ons to.. vary it a bit. Like in bar 4 hammer on the 2 3 and 5.

The first distortion riff is good. The harmony works really well and it leads nicely into the next riff at 30.

One thing I will say is I think that riff (at 30) would be better if it went down a key at bar 34. Especially with the drums changing.


Good start, wouldnt mind hearing it finished (if you're going to)

9/10 for what you have so far.


Crit.. either of the bottom two links in my sig?

Metalcore? I dunno lol.

I like the hammer-on idea.

I'll try the key change and see how I like it.

Yeah I'm gonna finish it eventually, not like I have anything better to do.

I'll crit yours, gimme a minute.
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god placed the fossils in earth to confuse the humans into thinking that earth is older than it actually is, therefore, making men try and think outside the box....

just kidding, there is no god



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jimmyled
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Join date: Apr 2008
783 IQ
#5
Quote by AustinxAtomic
I like the clean part, but once distortion kicks in... it's too metalcore..

Basically this.