Had this song for a while...music's complete but still writing the lyrics; got a verse and a chorus. Feedback please I'll do the same for yours

Time slips away, memories start to fade
I am shattered yet I remain
In you I find the perfect life
But still I wonder and question why

So here we are to hide the scars
That bring us only pain
And there you were, broken and hurt
Behind a veil of your mistakes
I just sang along to it to a random tune it my head... I like it quite alot.

It borders being cliched, but it's got it's originality in there. Keep it up.

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I liked it too especially the "and there you were, broken and hurt behind a veil of your mistakes". I thought that was a great image.

Keep up the good work and be sure to put the rest up when you finish it because I know I'd like to read it.
here, My Dear, here it is
i read it to the tune of this one section of a rite of passage by dream theater and it was cool haha. but yeah they're good