#1
This is the first time ive ever tried writing anything.

Made me feel better, even if its not very good

Heres what I got so far, I hope its not too bad

How can something that made me so happy
hurt so badly now?
Do I keep trying or is it all lost?
Lost in clouded memories and my shattered hopes
Hopes that still breathe desperation and truth
I still need you

I gave you everything at a terrible cost
My heart, my soul, all that I lost
But now I remember
Put my pen to paper
I still love you

Days and nights go by
Without you by my side
And I miss you every second
[Because I need you all the time]
I fear I am a sinking ship, falling to the bottom
Of a desperate and a lonely place
I pray you haven't forgotten
Of times we shared
And nights we cared
We have something special
You are always my girl

I gave you everything at a terrible cost
My heart, my soul, all that I lost
But now I remember
Put my pen to paper
I still love you

We are born to love and live
But love is so damn hard to give
Yet Ive found the one
I hold her close
I don't think she wants to know
You make my life complete, you make me so complete!

I gave you everything at a terrible cost
My heart, my soul, all that I lost
But now I remember
Put my pen to paper
I still love you


Any comments or crits are welcome, good or bad.

Thanks
Last edited by Aaron!! at Jul 12, 2009,
#4
okay..the bumping bit i get
But what about titles?
I read, but i didn't see anything.

I read again....but i don't see whats wrong with my title

sorry...im new in this forum
Last edited by Aaron!! at Jul 12, 2009,