Poll: Which one turns you on the most?
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#1
Theme: Dark

Alison Chains

Silenty trying to fall, she glides
Not knowing the feeling of ground
Constantly made to look behind
Until she finds a way to break

Dragging her legs through roses
She just wants to be cut
But the petals aren't enough
And just fill her
with a stinging scent

She streams across the sea
Once again made to look back
at her mistake
Her mistake and his victory
And still she can't drown in
the giant salt lake

She looks to the moon
But darkness falls on her
And she feels
Like the world was crashing, not her.


Memoirs of Insanity

The footsteps creep up on me,
Across the liquid floor,
A brittle man is climbing,
Towards the broken door,
The vines spiral up the tree,
Down to the blackened shore,
I want so bad to be free,
But still crawl back for more,

You, crawl across the jagged floor,
On your knees and hands,
Mirror, distorts twisted views,
Shards of glass in sands,

The silence burns through my veins,
Into my rotten core,
Pictures of you hide my shame,
My heart confuses yours,
To you, this is just a game,
A twisted mind distorts,
I can't remember my name,
Voice in my head reports,

I, scrawl warnings into the floor,
On my knees and hands,
Mirror, shatters wishful views,
Shards of glass in sands


Quote by Våd Hamster
Find a dice and assign a number to each girl. Throw the dice.


The number you hope for at the moment you throw the dice, is the one you'll want to keep.
#2
Good luck thanksgiving. Yours is good.
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#3
Good luck to you too. Yours is also an enjoyable read.


Quote by Våd Hamster
Find a dice and assign a number to each girl. Throw the dice.


The number you hope for at the moment you throw the dice, is the one you'll want to keep.
#4
I particularly like the title, very fitting.
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#5
Oh man, it's close. LOL.
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#6
I disliked both of these pieces.

Alison Chains was somewhat hit or miss. As a whole, the presentation was okay. Edit: I cringed when it read "she just wants to be cut". Lame.

Memoirs of Insanity had several problems. For a piece so blockish as to have a comma at the end of every line, it broke rhythm several times, and the alliteration made it worse. And then, nothing really happened. Just descriptors, jumping from one picture to the next.

*votes for 'rarnge*
Last edited by Ninjamonkey767 at Jul 13, 2009,
#7
There was alliteration? Where? I didn't notice that.
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#8
Quote by Ninjamonkey767
I disliked both of these pieces.

Alison Chains was somewhat hit or miss. As a whole, the presentation was okay. Edit: I cringed when it read "she just wants to be cut". Lame.

Memoirs of Insanity had several problems. For a piece so blockish as to have a comma at the end of every line, it broke rhythm several times, and the alliteration made it worse. And then, nothing really happened. Just descriptors, jumping from one picture to the next.

*votes for 'rarnge*


That's a kick in the pants for both of us


Quote by Våd Hamster
Find a dice and assign a number to each girl. Throw the dice.


The number you hope for at the moment you throw the dice, is the one you'll want to keep.
#9
^Edit: I hate to be such a dick about it. Sorry.

Quote by CGB89
There was alliteration? Where? I didn't notice that.


Eh, maybe alliteration wasn't the right word.

There were a lot of sharp sounds. A lot of emphasized T's, a lot of long A's. The sonics were grating.
Last edited by Ninjamonkey767 at Jul 13, 2009,
#10
Quote by Ninjamonkey767
^Edit: I hate to be such a dick about it. Sorry.

It's okay man.

I'm sure someone out there will like them... right?


Quote by Våd Hamster
Find a dice and assign a number to each girl. Throw the dice.


The number you hope for at the moment you throw the dice, is the one you'll want to keep.
#11
Memoirs of Insanity reminds me of A Looking in View, but then again I'm an AiC freak.
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#12
We shld just call this. I don't think green can catch up to orange...
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#14
Why?
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#16
Oic. Lol
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#17
Tht sux... I lost...
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