#1
One thing I was wondering was if I used too much repitition. Am I?

Dahmer

Give me pleasure,
I’ll give you death.
So intriguing,
The taste of flesh.
And when I’m done I’ll not regret,
A single crime I did commit.

[Chorus]
Cannibalistic,
Human Destroyer.

Cannibalistic,
I know how to torture.

Cannibalistic,
Human Destroyer.

Cannibalistic
I’ll be sure to torture

I will give you what you need,
And on your body I will feed.
I will make sure that you bleed,
Finding comfort in your screams.

[Chorus]

Give me pleasure,
I’ll give you death.
So intriguing,
The taste of flesh.
And when I’m done I’ll not regret,
A single crime I did commit.

[Chorus 2x]
#3
Mmmmm flesh =]
Definately not repetative. Very good.
My kind of music =D
#4
good. great! like sum dethklok man! rock on!
METALLICA!!!
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#5
Uh, yeah, it is very repetitive, you have about fourteen lines and you repeat an entire section that isn't a chorus (not to mention the chorus, which has eight lines, yet four of them are the same).
Lord Gold feeds from your orifices and he wants to see you sweat.
Lord Gold probes you publicly and makes your pussy wet.
Now say his name.....
#6
lordofthefood1, don't be an asswipe. lots of songs repeat a verse to emphasize it. for god's sake look at nirvana. and the chorus was great. reminded me of metallica and dethklok.

-1 lordofthefood1. in fact, -1 million, b*tch
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Epiphone Les Paul
Epiphone Sunburst
Ibanez V70CENT
LINE 6 Spider III 15
Peavey Bandit 112
Jim Dunlop, Dava, First Act Picks