#1
Alright, so i've decided to take a shot at a much much less serious song, something like Blink-182 or any other crazy punk band you can think of. i kinda like it, though i'm sure there's alot more i could add.

hey, how are you
i'm calling you again today
haven't talked to you since yesterday
what's the big deal
you haven't returned any of my calls
oh, you're in the hospital with your dad
well that's kinda sad
but doesn't he drive that black car
yeah, he's washin it in your yard

i can't stand this feeling
that you really don't like me
in fact, you might despise me
but that is just the life
of an ugly bastard

an ugly bastard, yeah

your locker is right next to mine
but your friend's is where your stuff is all the time

i can't understand it
i'm really not that bad
maybe i obsess a little bit
over anime and batman
but what's the matter with that
they're really pretty cool
even though everybody beats me up at our school
i could take them anyday

i can't stand this feeling
that you really don't like me
in fact, you might despise me
but that is just the life
of an ugly bastard

an ugly bastard, yeah,
an ugly bastard

oh you're dating Tim
from our biology class
you know he's pretty big
don't know what you see in him

i am so much better
just ignore my face
and maybe my clothes
and my obsession with Megan Fox
shes really quite the lady
but not as good as you
is what i say inside my head
maybe i'm just better off dead

i can't stand this feeling
that you really don't like me
in fact, you might despise me
but that is just the life
of an ugly bastard

an ugly bastard

an ugly bastard, bastard

an ugly bastard
#2
Yeah dude I think this totally works as a Blink-182-esque song. There were some pretty funny parts in there (I liked the line about her stuff always being in her friend's locker to avoid being next to the neighbor).

I have to admit that I was a little weary going into this but I was pleasantly surprised. Great job of creating that light-hearted/high-school/goofy feel to it.
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#3
The lyrics are good and there are some quite funny parts and it seems like a cleverly thought out song.

However my only issue with it would be it is probably a bit too long for a pop-punk song and doesn't seem to have anything that's really memorable in it.

I'll give the lyrics 6.5/10. It's good, but not great by any means. Quite origional though to be fair.
All the excitement
Blew me away
Through time
Straight through space just to here
I've got a legend to tell you today
So listen up, I want you all to hear
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#4
yeah, i usually write more than there's supposed to be i think, so i have more to work with and i could probably take out some stuff. thanks both of you
#5
Works perfect for a pop-punk esque teenage angst song. My only real complaint is the fact that towards the end of the song it becomes a bit repetative. Maybe, I don't know your bands vocal layout, but dual vocals or something could help that out though.

In general, this song will not win any awards (sorry dude), but this song could probably earn more revenue than a lot of us combined on this forum if our writings/songs were published.

It fit exactly into what you wanted to.

Cheers!

I've got two tunes. One is called "The Harsh, The" and the other "Together Through Life"
#6
i was actually thinking that dual vocals at points in the song would sound good, so thanks
#7
haha. not bad. i think it'd sound great with some music. just a suggestion, if you put music to it, try and give a u2 or green day or (like you said) blink 182 tone. just a suggestion. not bad tho. good job
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#8
i couldn't think of any different tone that would fit well with it. :P

it definitely would have to be some kind of power chord crazy song. haha