#1
Alright guys just wrote another song.


IS THIS IT

Gone to far,
no way back.
Turned my head.
Just to check,
if you´re there.
You don´t care.


This is the end,
but the end has always been -
my best friend.
We will go on.
But we will never reach the end -
my only friend.


All bridges broke.
All rivers dry.
Remember the time,
our love died.
Feel it now,
there is no "wow".


This is the end,
but the end has always been -
my best friend.
We will go on.
But we will never reach the end -
my only friend.


You ask me:
"Is this it?"
I tell you:
"This is it."
And you cried.
The whole night.


(Is this it? / This is it!
Is this it? / This is it!)
All chances faded.


C&C appreciated!
#2
I could actually get a pretty catchy rythm and melody in my head while reading this, so while its cliché, depending on how its put together in the song it could actually turn out to be a mind-stucker.
#3
I agree that a lot of it is pretty cliche and has been said countless times before but I still think it has the potential to be a pretty catchy song, depending on the genre and the type of music that you have with it.

One thing I'd suggest is to take out the line: "Feel it now, there is no "wow"" I think that just needs to go.

Also, it looks pretty short as it is right now. You may want to add another few verses or maybe just sing the chorus twice to give it some length. Just a suggestion.
here, My Dear, here it is
#4
I think it could be a really catchy song like these guys said. Some of it is a bit cliche but as long as you harmonize a good rythm to the rythm the lyrics have you should be good.

All bridges broke.
All rivers dry.
Remember the time,
our love died.
Feel it now,
there is no "wow".


don't really like this last line maybe rhyme it with something else or don't rhyme at all.

Could you help me with my song?
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1164968