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#1
These are the first lyrics I've written so be a little easy on me but still let me know what you really think. This song is a part of an album which is outlined as a whole story in the 18th century. Its like The Decemberists. Listen to the song (doesn't have lyrics yet) http://artists.ultimate-guitar.com/gondoliers/


Verse:
Marooned on an island
With nothing but my loyal crew
This Imposter who stole my life,
Deserted me, whatever shall I do

Chorus:
I will plan my vengeance
For this offence
So this fake will reap
His consequence

Verse:
Fortune rains upon me
As a ship approaches the shore
Such a rare opportunity
That will happen nevermore

Chorus:
I will plan my vengeance
For this offence
So this fake will reap
His consequence

Verse:
Hoist the sails
For all else fails
We would have died in vain
So remember it is us that shall remain

Chorus:
I will plan my vengeance
For this offence
So this fake will reap
His consequence

Verse:
Depart for the mainland
For our home we will return
To the old pub in England
We will sojourn
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Commandeer (w melodica) gp3.gp3
#2
Hey man, if you don't mind could you check out the forum rules here ------> RULES
Thanks.

Polls aren't allowed when posting something you've written here, which is why I brought it up.

This thread will be closed, but feel free to repost your piece without the polls.




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