#1
It's one of those ****ty acoustic punk rock songs.
It's been recorded, you could listen to it and give me some feedback, if you were inclined to do so.

http://www.myspace.com/threehoursong
There's a link to the site it's on. Enjoy.

Please tell me there's more
More than constant fighting with those I have left
More than missing all those I've lost
Please tell me all those pessimists
That I've always found so confusing
Weren't ****ing right

Please tell me that distance doesn't matter
And that everything works itself out
Tell me that all these hopes and dreams
Aren't just wastes of time

Just look at the **** I've gottem myself into
Life becomes a ****ing reality tv show
When you do what you think is right
When you do the only thing you know to do
And everybody is there for you when no one is around


Well I'm not giving in
They aren't going to win
But that dosent mean this cant disgust me
Why is it we've all become what we are
Maybe I'm just a dumbass
But I'd like to die with as many
Friends as possible

Well I'm not sure why
But for some reason it all feels right
The hate, the fighting
Like maybe there is a point to it all
Maybe something good will come of this

Just look at the **** I've gottem myself into
Life becomes a ****ing reality tv show
When you do what you think is right
When you do the only thing you know to do
And everybody is there for you when no one is around
#2
Ha, it must suck a lot more than I thought it did if no one at all feels like commenting on it
#3
Don't double post. And now that I've posted here, I guess I have to crit.

I thought the whole thing was very cliche and very much like a generic punk song. It's written okay and everything, but its just so unoriginal...That's my only complaint.

If you could take a look at the piece in my sig, that would be great.
Today I feel electric grey
I hope tomorrow, neon black
#4
Cliche? That's the one thing I actually didn't expect.
Thanks for the honesty, though, generic "I like it" doesen't get me very far in the way of deciding what I need to work on with my songs.
#5
very generic chord progression. if i were you i would invest in a semi decent mic...cuz you are distorting the hell out of that one...

Crit my songs? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1166006
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#6
it's okay, kinda cliché sounding lyrics.
work on that, get a better mic and please, oh please, for christ's sake don't scream that much.

my eardrums almost exploded, not in a good way.
the "less screamy" version is better.

still, better mic, less cliché, work on your vocals ...
it's okay, i guess

C4C ?
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1166689
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