#1
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Dlv302rpnHo

Please tell me whwat you think. I wrote it myself, but haven't finished working on the lyrics ^_^

Apologies for the crappy quality. I recorded this on a laptop's in-built microphone.
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Last edited by hazardmaster at Jul 20, 2009,
#2
first off, the title was cliche to me. it was very hard to hear anything. i had to turn my speakers all the way up. it reminded me of greenday. good playing and singing though, and the lyrics were okay. if youre playing on the acoustic though, it would sound good to maybe play some of those chord open, instead of power chord style, and also possibly change keys, or use a diff progression as it gets repeditive. keep it up man. thats way better then my first song.

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#3
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first off, the title was cliche to me. it was very hard to hear anything. i had to turn my speakers all the way up. it reminded me of greenday. good playing and singing though, and the lyrics were okay. if youre playing on the acoustic though, it would sound good to maybe play some of those chord open, instead of power chord style, and also possibly change keys, or use a diff progression as it gets repeditive. keep it up man. thats way better then my first song.

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Mmm, sorry for the cliche title. I jsut felt that word perfectly fit the emotions that I wanted to express in the song, and just could NOT resist using it!

Ah, alas, I am recording this single-track on my laptop's in-built mic. Do you know how I could up the natural volume level of a mp3 file?

Yeah, this is the first original song I have done with my band so we have very little experience. I just came to practice with a verse and chorus, and just put some simple chords to it and it flowed like that. I am working on actually completing the song, but IMO I think it's quite good for the first take and it was all improvised

Thanks for the very helpful crit! It means a lot and gives me and idea of the areas which I have to work on and all
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