#1
Hey guitar-guys!
Just wrote this song.

THE KNIFE

[Verse]
Same situation as always.
Noone knows how it started.
But I was going to win today,
until you pulled out the knife.

[Ref.]
C´mon that´s not fair (at all),
I was bound to succeed (tonight),
you were crawling (on the gound),
but the knife changed it.

[Bridge]
Now will you stab me?
Will you stab me?
(You won´t)

[Verse]
Great, so you really did it.
Do you feel more confident now?
Yes you´ve won this round,
only because of the knife.

[Ref.]
C´mon that´s not fair (at all),
I was bound to succeed (tonight),
you were crawling (on the gound),
but the knife changed it.

[Outro]
Now you stabbed me!
Now you really did!
Now you are a men!
Now you get respect!
Now you stabbed me,
with the knife!

Please tell me what you think, I´m not really sure about it.
#2
seems a little too simple. is their any symbolism or parralels? remember the whole point of lyrics to music is to relate to your audience, but i don't know how anyone can relate to this.
#3
It´s actually a song about a night I was at a party with a few mates and when we left we saw a guy fighting with another and got stabbed like in the song.

Yeah, I´m not really happy with it yet so is there anything I should change?
#4
To be honest I always prefer a song that rhymes. It seems a little emo and generic, didn't really like it too much. It doesn't really flow to well, the lyrics seem choppy. It could use a lot of work.
#5
The song doesnt make sense without your explanation O.o
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#6
It seems kinda repetative.
If you've had a first-hand experience with this kinda thing, picture it in your head. Remember everything you can about that night. The smell, the temperature, how you felt, what was said...Then try to flesh it out. Maybe start over.
It's a great topic, but needs lots of work.
#7
Quote by re-chorder
It seems kinda repetative.
If you've had a first-hand experience with this kinda thing, picture it in your head. Remember everything you can about that night. The smell, the temperature, how you felt, what was said...Then try to flesh it out. Maybe start over.
It's a great topic, but needs lots of work.


yeah I will propably rewrite it. thanks guys!