#1
Imagine a kind of prog-tinged rock song, like Coheed and Cambria mixed with Biffy Clyro mixed with The Fall of Troy. Comments appreciated


I'm in this place, it's making me restless
The book I'd write is a dark one
Open to news of any conviction
I'm only left with a cold one

You're nothing, anyway
It's nothing, anyway

This guy's a cunt and he's making me restless
I'll be worst off if things just stay the same
Experience has just made me faithless
I'm just gonna be round
I don't know if I'll love you like I loved you before
I hope I don't turn and hate you
I hope I don't turn and hate you

You're nothing, anyway
It's nothing, anyway

While the enemy sits inside your court
Your conscience dies inside yourself
You're not letting go of your parade face
Up to the spires of hell
Drop down

When you're setting surplus symptoms
The chances of it drop to hell
The anger twisted boulder spiked with
A dire wish for your good health
I own an Orange Amp.
Fuck aye Dai.
#3
Will do, thanks for the heads up.
Less of a heads up, but you get what I mean.

EDIT: Why was this reported? Due to the use of the word cunt? Other than that I can't find any rules that have been broken.
I own an Orange Amp.
Fuck aye Dai.
Last edited by DeuceMortius at Jul 20, 2009,
#4
Quote by FlyingLeukemia
*reported*

Read the rules and see why this was reported, thanks.
Please be specific about which rule was violated, especially when the violation is minor.
Else you just confuse the user.

Thanks



Quote by DeuceMortius
Will do, thanks for the heads up.
Less of a heads up, but you get what I mean.

EDIT: Why was this reported? Due to the use of the word cunt? Other than that I can't find any rules that have been broken.
There have been several other threads closed since the report but this one is still open. Either the Mods don't agree with the reason for the report, or FlyingLeukemia was unsuccessful in actually accomplishing that report.

1 - Cunt seems unnecessary to me, and I don't think it helps the piece all that much. That said, it doesn't really qualify as being inappropriate. I doubt that would be the reason.

2 - You had an identical piece posted previously. BUT, this one has much more added to the length. So it really isn't against the rules. However the previous one had a title that simply shouldn't have been allowed. Don't be surprised if the previous one gets locked, if a Mod notices it.

3 - The title of this thread is just slightly out of bounds.
The preferred method of posting with out a name for the piece is:
Untitled
or you could put:
Untitled (song)
putting the form or the genre in parentheses IS permitted.

"As of yet" is extraneous information. You really shouldn't put it in the thread title.
Maybe that's what FlyingLeukemia was thinking. Idk.


If I have time I'll return to crit this later.
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Last edited by SomeoneYouKnew at Jul 21, 2009,