#4
Add more fills.

I would have put some sweeps in there, but that's just me.
Play more straight 8ths rather than whole notes. It will drive the song more.
But other than that really tight playing dude.
#5
More fills. Crank the drive, and play 8ths hard with a pick? Suggest to the whole of your band that the song gets a harsher, more "live" mix next time- it sounds kinda neutered ATM, my band had that happen to it

Liking the "OIOIOI!"s though.

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