#1
Softly spoken
All alone
Are the words in which I've grown

I don't know you
From the night
But I feel this time's alright

And I see the reflection in your eye
A certain innocence I hope won't die
For mine is lost, runes all the way
And I don't know the bounds for faith


Only human
what I am
If you take the soul what is a man

Inspiration
What you are
Never thought this time it'd go so far

(Chorus)
And i see the reflection in your eye
A certain innocence I hope won't die
For mine is lost, runes all the way
And I don't know the bounds for faith

(Bridge)
I've gone past the point this time
I've left out the reason and rhyme

And for once I've gone my own way
And for once I wish you'd stay


Softly spoken
Heard by all
Are the words by which we fall

You don't know me
From the night
And I hope this time you'll fight

(Chorus)
And I see the reflection in your eye
A certain innocence I hope won't die
For mine is lost, runes all the way
And I don't know the bounds for faith
#2
Some of the rhyming sounds forced. Personally, I feel that it should be written as poetry (that means no chorus or pointing out different parts) and that when you finally put it to music you can worry about the chorus (ie. pick the strongest most thematic stanza for the chorus). And just because it's a song doesn't mean it has to have a rhyme pattern of AABB or ABAB, mix it up. Btw, if it's not any trouble I would greatly appreciate any crit on the first piece in my sig (Springs, Gears, and Black Holes). All in all it was good.