#1
alright, here's a song i'm thinking about recording. it's kind of a soft acoustic song. so crits are very welcome.


i thought i saw you the other day
walking down the street
your reflection in the glass
that was in front of me

i turned
to see if it was really you
but no one was around
maybe you disappeared from view
or i can't think of a better excuse

it wasn't you in that window
it was you inside my head
your smile and your touch
i can't forget
it wasn't you in that window
i just wanted it to be
but the streets were empty
maybe you're just running away from me

and when i kept walking
i heard your voice
calling out my name
but i knew it wasn't you
i knew it wasn't true
you're gone
and there's there's nothing left for me to do

it wasn't you in that window
it was you inside my head
your smile and your touch
i can't forget
it wasn't you in that window
i just wanted it to be
but the streets were empty
maybe you're just running away from me

when i got up to my front door
i thought i saw your shadow
but you're not around anymore
i guess i just can't forget
but the past has been done
but i still ask myself
just who it was that won

it wasn't you in that window
it was you inside my head
your smile and your touch
i can't forget
it wasn't you in that window
i just wanted it to be
but the streets were empty
maybe you're just running away from me
#2
This is great. I love how the literal lines you used can be taken metaphorically as well.

In a way, it's a bit sad. The emotion displayed is really effective.

I have to say this is probably one of the best (if not the best) song I have critiqued in this forum. (Only out of about 5 or 6 though)

Well done

I'd appreciate if you take a look at the song in my sig
Last edited by 1nSingularity at Jul 22, 2009,
#3
wow, thanks. yeah, it is a bit sad, but i really couldn't think of what other kind of song it could be considering the acoustic riffs i have.