this is the best post-rock piece ive ever heard, just don't ruin it with bad lyrics and you should really consider sending it to a big label, the only thing that really bothered me was bar 34, fix that and follow my suggestion
I think the guitar and the piano at the beginning of the song are off just a little bit, you may need to do more to have these mesh together better because imho it doesn't really work. Really needs work on bar 34 as said above. Just coming to an abrupt stop and then coming off with another part of the song is no way to transition. I did really like the second guitar coming in near the beginning of the song though. I really dug when it started on bar 56. That was a nice little atmosphere you created. Well done. All in all I thought it was good but that could be a really great song if you fix a few things.


Some Kind of Peace